Is this usage of "as well as" and punctuation correct?
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Is this usage of "as well as" and punctuation correct?
Hello! Please help me with the sentence from an abstract to an article.
The role of standardization in achieving strategic goals of the Russian
Federation development is considered, as well as the provisions of the Digital
Economy of the Russian Federation program in the field of standardization.
Is it grammatically correct? Is the comma needed?
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DavidCrosbie
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The first problem to tackle is articles — frequently a nightmare for Russians speaking of writing English. Because of the phrase of the Russian Federation development you must write
the strategic goals.
That's probably my only grammatical objection, but there are other things that could be improved.
You seem to be writing about goals of development — adding as extra information strategic and of the Russian federation. I think it would be better if you change to development goals. Thus:
achieving the strategic development goals of the Russian Federation
I don't see why your first clause is PASSIVE. It gives too much importance to the words is considered. Another problem with having is considered in the middle of your sentence is that it leads the reader to expect a clause with a different verb after the comma.
These problems disappear if you start with ACTIVE
This paper [or dissertation or whatever] considers the role ...
After the comma you could then write
and also the provisions...
I'm not sure why you write program rather than Program. If it's the official name of a program, then all the content-words should be capitalised. Thus
the Digital Economy of the Russian Federation Program
— although I suspect it's better described as
the Digital Economy Program of the Russian Federation
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