Would you please correct my sentence?

Plese can you help me with those following sentences? Are they correct?

  1. There is almost no food left in our house. Some of us should go shopping, the fridge of our´s is as empty as the one of our poor relatives´.

  2. Every two hours she drinks up such a strong cup of coffee! Whatever advice against drinking that has never helped.

  3. Some of us should explain how much information is needed, to everybody understands it, to him

Comments

  • @Babeta1221

    1.

    • There is almost no food left in our house
      — no grammatical problem

    • Some of us should go shopping
      — grammatically possible but strange. Why not somebody? And why not must?
      Is it important that more the one of you should go?

    • our's is the wrong spelling

    • In any case the fridge of ours is not acceptable
      — We use of ours with a not the, but 'a fridge of ours' means 'one of our fridges
      — Use our fridge

    • the one of
      — I don't think we ever use this. We do use that of, but it's very formal
      The most natural thing is too use more words. For example
      the one that belongs to our poor relatives or our poor relatives' fridge,

    2.

    • drink up means 'finish what you have started drinking'
      Use drinks

    • a strong cup of coffee
      — We usually write a cup of strong coffee. OK, not always, but it seems that here a cup is not important while strong coffee is very important

    • such a strong cup of coffee _ suggest that the cup is strong
      — It would be better to write _a cup of such strong coffee
      or simply such a strong coffee

    • However, I don't think such works here. We do use it in different ways
      — as an explanation e.g. She can't get to sleep at night. She drinks such strong coffee.
      — introducing a result e.g. She drinks such strong coffee that she can't get to sleep at night.
      If you're speaking to someone you can use What What strong coffee she drinks!
      In writing, use an intensifying word or words, e.g. _very very strong! really strong! terrible strong! _etc

    • Whatever advice I don't think this is enough to show the reader what you mean

    • Whatever advice she's been given would be better — but not as the SUBJECT of the sentence
      — But you could have 'it' as the SUBJECT: Whatever advice she's been given, it hasn't helped

    • If you wan't to express the idea 'failed every time', you'll need to change the rest of the sentence. For example
      She's been advised against it many times, but it's never helped

    • drinking that is ungrammatical because that should refer to something specific
      — You could write drinking as much as that or drinking such strong coffee

    3.

    • Some of us should explain how much information is needed
      — grammatical, but I suspect you mean somebody
      As I said before some of us means 'more than one of use'

    • to everybody understands it
      — not grammatical, and I don't know what you mean

    • to him
      — not grammatical because no MALE PERSON has been mentioned

    • The commas make no sense

  • @DavidCrosbie Could you please tell me what is wrong about the other sentences? Where exactly are the mistakes? Please, I am desperate

  • DavidCrosbieDavidCrosbie ✭✭✭
    edited January 16

    @Babeta1221

    What do you mean by 'the other sentences'?

    I've told you all the things I'm unhappy about in all three sentences.

    I can't comment much on your third sentence because I don't understand it.

  • @DavidCrosbie
    that she drinks a strong coffee every two hours and nobody is able to do something about it despite they tried to advice her not to drink that but those pieces of advice were never successful.

    • nobody is able to do something
      Try instead
      nobody is able to do anything

    • despite they tried
      Try instead
      although they have tried

    • to advice
      Try instead
      to advise

    • not to drink that
      Try instead
      not to
      or
      not to drink so much

    • those pieces of advice
      Try instead
      that advice

    • were never successful
      Try instead
      has never been taken

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