sentence formation and punctuation

Hello friends, can somebody have look at this paragraph and give me a guidance and a correction for sentence structure and punctuation and other errors, which ever you guys can find. thanks...

She could have warbled- ‘ech-ech-che’-‘ech-ech-heoo’-‘ech-he-che-hooo’-‘ecehcehe-cheu-oooo-yodleee-yodleee-ooooo’, if He were to speak her mind! Instead her cosmos fettering marine eyes, glowing his filial porous face, shone his happiness lambent than pulsar. Her mother’s bliss evidently unbounded in infinite walls, soared over, as she was handed to him first time! Never had been handed embodied happiness, meaning of his life covered in cottony care; yes she was it! The windfall of heaven, in his own hands, teeny and curious, shifting cottony sponge he fretted to contain; swirling her ruby hands, catching indiscernible iota or to pluck his jutting nose-her mother needlessly complaining about. He sagged his head and then nosed, popping melon red splotch on her nose, she lustred.

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  • DavidCrosbieDavidCrosbie ✭✭✭
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    @manthanrajaswami the vocabulary you've chose is extremely difficult for anybody to use — even using one of those words in a very simple sentence.

    For example, here's one of your sentences with all the difficult words bold and struck through

    Instead her cosmos fettering marine eyes, glowing his filial porous face, shone his happiness lambent than pulsar.

    The verbs glow and shine are not unusual as INTRANSITIVE VERBS — that is, verbs without a grammatical OBJECT. But the way you use them here is just as strange as the words I've highlighted. Another grammatical error is the use of than without a COMPARATIVE form.

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